self introduction
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
Hello, My name is Min tae Hwang
My friends call me rye.
I’m in my late 20s. I am 24 years old.
When it comes to my appearance, I’m tall and slim
My hometown is seoul.
but, Now I live with my family in ansan which is located the outskirt of Seoul.
I work at an IT company called Samsung SDS which is a leading IT company in Korea.
I have been working in the Service system Group for 9 months.
My personality is quiet and calm (outgoing and active), so my job is suitable for me.
And most of all, I would like to be a professional server engineer near future.
In my free time, I enjoy listening to music and reading books.
That’s all about me. Thanks.
My friends call me rye.
I’m in my late 20s. I am 24 years old.
When it comes to my appearance, I’m tall and slim
My hometown is seoul.
but, Now I live with my family in ansan which is located the outskirt of Seoul.
I work at an IT company called Samsung SDS which is a leading IT company in Korea.
I have been working in the Service system Group for 9 months.
My personality is quiet and calm (outgoing and active), so my job is suitable for me.
And most of all, I would like to be a professional server engineer near future.
In my free time, I enjoy listening to music and reading books.
That’s all about me. Thanks.
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