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My favorite place.

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Someone give me qestion.
If you have a lot of money, what do you want to do?
If I have enough money and time, I want to go around world everywhere.
Not buy the car, the house, etc..
I want to go uyuni dsert in Bolivia, and Iguazu Falls in Brazil and so on.
I was travle many place like Ezypt, Turkey, China, Europ. but I want more.
I think Earth have many beatiful and great place.
Now I'm young and heathy. So I want to go many other place as much as I can.
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Someone give asked me a qestion. If you have a lot of money, what do you want to do? If I have enough money and time, I want to go travel around the world. everywhere. Not to buy the a car, the house, etc.. I want to go to Uyuni Desert in Bolivia, and Iguazu Falls in Brazil and so on. I was travle I have been to many places like Egypt, Turkey, China and Europe but I want more. I think Earth have has many beatiful beautiful and great places. Now I'm young and heathy, so I want to go many other places as much as I can.

 

Hello Hana,

Thank you for this great composition and for telling me about your travels overseas. I want to go to many places as well while I'm still young. I've checked Iguazu Falls and it's beautiful but since I'm scared of water, I prefer going to Uyuni Desert instead. Well again, thank you for this. laugh

-Beth-  ^_^

 

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