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Where and how often do you go shopping? Who do you usually go shopping with?

작성자: 71613 담당 튜터: Monica
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My favorite shopping mall is the “Home Plus” where is close to my house. It takes about 10 minute by walk from my house.
It is not only very large, but also quite modern. It is brand new 5-story building.
As soon as I arrived there, I can find food court and go to the second floor, I can see grocery store. Also there are many other stores such as electronics, furniture.
In addition, it has very spacious free parking-lot and very kind staffs.
I usually go shopping with my family on weekends. Because I am busy working on weekdays.
From time to time, we would have dinner at the food court after shopping.
I think that it is good place to go shopping and spend time with my family.
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[c o r r e c t i o n]

My favorite shopping mall is the “Home Plus” where is close to my house.

-> My favorite shopping mall is the Home Plus where which is close to my house.

It takes about 10 minute by walk from my house.

-> It takes about 10 minutes by walk on foot from my place house.

It is not only very large, but also quite modern. -good

It is brand new 5-story building.

-> It is a brand new 5-story building.

As soon as I arrived there, I can find food court and go to the second floor, I can see grocery store.

-> As soon as I arrived there, I can could find a food court. and go to

On the second floor, I can also see find a grocery store.

Also there are many other stores such as electronics, furniture.

-> Also There are also many other stores such as electronics shop, furniture shop, etc.

In addition, it has very spacious free parking-lot and very kind staffs.

-> In addition, it the mall has a very spacious and free parking-lot and with very kind staffs.

I usually go shopping with my family on weekends.

Because I am busy working on weekdays.

-> I usually go shopping with my family on weekends because I am busy working on weekdays.

From time to time, we would have dinner at the food court after shopping. -good

I think that it is good place to go shopping and spend time with my family.-good

[c o m m e n t ]

Hi. A shopping mall is one of the best places for us to unwind and to have a great tim with our family and friends. We can do a lot things when we are at the mall. I am glad that you actually enjoy doing it. Going to the mall has been a part of the lives of Filipinos like me. We enjoy doing things at the mall. Hope you'll fun the next the time you visit it!

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