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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 11. 14 조회 12264

Unit 18 - musical instrument

작성자: HWMC201200797 담당 튜터: Wynston2
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
I played a piano when I was a child. My parents wanted I play a piano, so I learned it from a academy. I learned for 2 or 3 years, and I played well compare to other students. However, I forget all about the skill playing now. At that time, many Korea households teach piano for their children. If I marry and have children, I will teach them any music instruments through music academic. It is needed when they grow up. It is a kind of hobby. When a person want to play any music instrument as a hobby, if they can play, they can just start. And they will thank their parent, because they had a chance learning the instrument.
튜터 교정 답변

I played a piano when I was a child. My parents wanted  I ME TO play a THE piano, so I learned TO PLAY IT AT MY AFTER SCHOOL ACADEMY PROGRAM it from a academy. I STUDIED THE PIANO  learned for 2 or 3 years, and I played well compareD to other students. However BUT NOW I HAVE forgetTEN all about MY PIANO the skill playing SKILLS. now. At that time, many KoreaN households teach TAUGHT piano for TO their children. If I marry and have children, I will teach them MY CHILDREN A VRIETY OF any musicAL instruments through A music academY, BECAUSE I FEEL THEY COULD BENEFIT FROM IT ic. It is needed when they grow up. It WOULD BE LIKE is a kind of hobby. When a person want to play any music instrument as a hobby, if they can play, ALL they HAVE TO DO IS SIMPLY  can just start and theN will BE GRATEFUL TO thank their parentS, because they had a chance OF learning the AN instrument.

 

 

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