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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 11. 14 조회 12983

House

작성자: 1102045838 담당 튜터: Lovely
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I live in 2 bedroom apartment in Gunpo city and I live on the first floor.
I moved this house after I got married. It's been 2 years since I live in there.
There are 2 bedrooms, a living room, a kitchen and a bathroom.
The main room is for my wife and me. we usually take a rest and get to a calm sleep.
The small room is for my baby who don't be born. he will be born next year.
We decorated the interior for my baby such as baby bed, wallpaper and mobile.
There are a TV and a couch in the living room. so we enjoy spending time to watch TV.
My favorite place in the house is the living room.
There are not only TV but also computer and radio.
I enjoy surfing Internet to get more information of product I want
or I like to study English to improve online.
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I live in 2 bedroom apartment in Gunpo city and I live on the first floor. I moved this house after I got married. It's been 2 years since I live in there. There are 2 bedrooms, a living room, a kitchen and a bathroom. The main room is for my wife and me. we usually take a rest and get to a calm sleep. The small room is for my baby who don't be born. he will be born next year. We decorated the interior for my baby such as baby bed, wallpaper and mobile. There are a TV and a couch in the living room. so we enjoy spending time to watch TV. My favorite place in the house is the living room. There are not only TV but also computer and radio. I enjoy surfing Internet to get more information of product I want or I like to study English to improve online.

1. I live in 2 bedroom apartment in Gunpo city and I live on the first floor. BETTER SAY -> I live in a 2 bedroom apartment in Gunpo city and I live on the first floor.

2. I moved this house after I got married. It's been 2 years since I live in there. -> I moved to that house after I got married. It's been 2 years since I live in there.

3. There are 2 bedrooms, a living room, a kitchen and a bathroom. Good job on this

4. The main room is for my wife and me. we usually take a rest and get to a calm sleep. Good job on this

5. The small room is for my baby who don't be born. he will be born next year. -> The small room is for my baby who isn't born yet. He will be born next year.

6. We decorated the interior for my baby such as baby bed, wallpaper and mobile. -> We decorated the interior of the room for my baby such as baby bed, wallpaper and mobile.

7. There are a TV and a couch in the living room. so we enjoy spending time to watch TV. -> There is a TV and a couch in the living room so we enjoy spending time to watch TV.

8. My favorite place in the house is the living room. -> Good job on this

9. There are not only TV but also computer and radio. -> What we have there is not only a TV, but also a computer and a radio.

10. I enjoy surfing Internet to get more information of product I want. -> I enjoy surfing Internet to get more information of the product that I want.

11. or I like to study English to improve online. -> I also like to study  English online to improve.

Hi Kent,

I'm glad to see the improvement on your skills. You have constructed good sentences to express your thoughts. Your errors are minimal this time. Just be careful with the word usage and punctuation. Nevertheless, this is a great job! Keep up the good work! :-)

-Lovely

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