IPO
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
Our company listed on korea stock market last friday for the first time after company established. Many of my colleagues was hit by millions of bucks. Most of them are ten or more years old in this company.
I had a drink with one of them last friday. And I had stunned after founding that he had no challeges or dream with that money. He just wanted to raise their children with a good education.
And he just wanted to stay in this company, because he doesn't have anything to do at present. And he doesn't want to get other's eyes that he is a jobless even he is a millionaire.
Oh! my!
I had a drink with one of them last friday. And I had stunned after founding that he had no challeges or dream with that money. He just wanted to raise their children with a good education.
And he just wanted to stay in this company, because he doesn't have anything to do at present. And he doesn't want to get other's eyes that he is a jobless even he is a millionaire.
Oh! my!
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