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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 11. 18 조회 13931

Playing a game.

작성자: 1101863214 담당 튜터: Wynston2
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Frankly speaking, i didn't like to play a game both laptop and mobile. But, it is very interesting for me to use the settop box like playstation. Especially, i love to play a winning eleven which is related to soccer. most of guys usually love to play a soccer except of amereican boy(they more love america football than soccer).

there are many geme room that facility is equipped with enough playstaion in south korea. and using fee is also very cheap. so many south korean guys usually go there to play a game after either drinking alchol something or working.
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Frankly speaking, i I didn't like to play a game both laptop and mobile. But, it is very interesting for me to use the settop box like Playstation. Especially, i I love to play a 'winning eleven', which is related to soccer. Most of guys usually love to play a soccer except of 'Amereican Boy' (they more love AmericaN Football MORE than soccer). There are many gAme room that faciliTIES is equipped with enough playstaion in South Korea,  and using  THE fee is also very cheap,  so many South Korean guys usually go there to play a game after either drinking alchol OR SOMETIMES AFTER WORK.  something or working.

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