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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 11. 19 조회 14094

Unit 20 - Watching sports games

작성자: HWMC201200797 담당 튜터: Wynston2
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I like to watch sports games on TV. When I was a child, I liked to watch basketball games in Korea league. At that time, basketball is most popular sports in Korea, so the players is very popular to girls like actors. But now, I like to watch overseas soccer games such as England, Spain, Germany. Korea soccer league is not interesting because it is too slow when they play games. Therefore whenever I watch that, I'm sleepy. In Worldcup or Olympic season, I usually stay up late at night. I want to watch Korean players, and cheer up. And I want to feel the moment that they get gold medals.
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I like to watch sports games on TV. When I was a child, I liked to watch basketball games in KoreaN league. At that time, basketball is WAS mostTHE  popular sports in Korea, so AND the players is WERE very popular to girls; THE SAME AS like actors. But now, I like to watch overseas soccer games such as England, Spain, Germany. Korea soccer league is not interesting because it is too slow when they play games. Therefore whenever I watch that, IT PUTS ME TO SLEEP!  m sleepy. In DURING Worldcup or Olympic season, I usually stay up late at night, BECAUSE I want to watch Korean players, and cheer up. And I want to feel the EXCITEMENT WHEN moment that they get RECEIVE THEIR gold medals.

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