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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 11. 19 조회 14375

about my favorite food

작성자: 71613 담당 튜터: Monica
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My favorite food is pasta. I am pretty good at cooking and enjoy making it. It is very easy to make but tastes so good.
There are a few steps when cooking pasta. First, prepare some ingredients such as carrots, onions, potatoes, bacon, cream. First bring a large pot of salted water to a boil. When the water starts to boil, cook the pasta. When it’s ready, drain the pasta and add it to the bacon and mix well. If you want it extra creamy, add more cream. Like I said, it’s easy to make and the taste is guaranteed.
Over all, I hope that you have a chance to eat the pasta I made.
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[C O R R E C T I O N]

My favorite food is pasta. -good!

I am pretty good at cooking and enjoy making it.

-> I am pretty good at cooking and I enjoy making it.

It is very easy to make but tastes so good. -good!

There are a few steps when cooking pasta.

-> There are a few steps when cooking pasta.

First, prepare some ingredients such as carrots, onions, potatoes, bacon, cream.

-> First, prepare some ingredients such as carrots, onions, potatoes, bacon,and cream.

First bring a large pot of salted water to a boil.

-> First Then, bring a large pot of salted water to a and boil it.

When the water starts to boil, cook the pasta. -good!

When it’s ready, drain the pasta and add it to the bacon and mix well. - great!

If you want it extra creamy, add more cream.

-> If you want it to become extra creamyier, add more cream.

Like I said, it’s easy to make and the taste is guaranteed. -good!

Over all, I hope that you have a chance to eat the pasta I made.

-> Over all, I hope that you  will have a chance to eat the pasta I made.

 

[C O M M E N T]

I love reading this! I feel like I am reading a script from a commercial. You can be the next Korean Chef! ^_^ Well, I have been craving for pasta, especifically the white pasta, or carbonara. I really want to try the one you cooked. I will go and fly to Korea. Please wait for me. Hahahahahaha. Thanks for sharing!

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