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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 11. 24 조회 13044

Hospital

작성자: 1102045838 담당 튜터: Lovely
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The clinics are all over the place but there is no clinic around my office.
Whenever I go to clinic, I have to take a public transportation.
I have been suffering from skin disease for 3 years.
It is quite difficult to cure my skin disease.
My illness has a relapse.
2 weeks ago, I went to dermatology clinic to treat my skin disease.
I was prescribed medicine and I steadily rubbed it on hand
Now I get well but it will relapse a month later.
I worry about my skin disease because there is no medicine to cure my disease perfectly.
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The clinics are all over the place but there is no clinic around my office. Whenever I go to clinic, I have to take a public transportation. I have been suffering from skin disease for 3 years. It is quite difficult to cure my skin disease. My illness has a relapse. 2 weeks ago, I went to dermatology clinic to treat my skin disease. I was prescribed medicine and I steadily rubbed it on hand Now I get well but it will relapse a month later. I worry about my skin disease because there is no medicine to cure my disease perfectly.

1. The clinics are all over the place but there is no clinic around my office. GOOD JOB! smileyyes

2. Whenever I go to clinic, I have to take a public transportation. GOOD JOB! smileyyes

3. I have been suffering from skin disease for 3 years. GOOD JOB! smileyyes

4. It is quite difficult to cure my skin disease. GOOD JOB! smileyyes

5. My illness has a relapse. GOOD JOB! smileyyes

6. 2 weeks ago, I went to dermatology clinic to treat my skin disease. -> 2 weeks ago, I went to A dermatology clinic to treat my skin disease.

7. I was prescribed medicine and I steadily rubbed it on hand -> The doctor prescribed a medicine and I steadily rubbed it on my hand.

8. Now I get well but it will relapse a month later. -> Now I got well but it will relapse a month later.

9. I worry about my skin disease because there is no medicine to cure my disease perfectly. -> I am worried about my skin disease because there is no medicine to cure my disease perfectly.

Hi Kent!

I'm sorry to hear about your skin condition, but I hope you'll be able to find the cure for it later on. Talking about your composition, job well done! You have constructed good sentences, you have also less errors this time. I'm so happy to see your improvement, just be careful with the verb forms. Keep up the good work! :-)

-Lovely
 

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