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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 11. 26 조회 12950

Unit 21 -Martial Art

작성자: HWMC201200797 담당 튜터: Wynston2
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학생 제출 원문
When I was child, I learned Taekwondo. At that time, there was a only one martial art academy, Taekwondo. In Korea, most people learn it when they was young. However, they forget it easily because they are not interested in it after they grow up. Martial Arts such as Taekwondo is not popular in Korea, so it is hard to see people that practice it in public area such as park. If I have a chance that I learn nartial art, I will learn it. The reason is I want to become more healthier.
튜터 교정 답변

When I was A child, I learned Taekwondo. At that time, there was a only one martial artS academy.  Taekwondo. In Korea, most people learn it when they was ARE young. However, they forget it easily because they are not interested in it after they grow up. Martial Arts such as Taekwondo is not popular in Korea, so it is hard to see people that practice it in public areaS such as parkS. If I have a chance that I TO learn martial arts, I will DO SO learn it. The reason is THAT I want to become more HEALTHY.

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