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Unit 23. Playing a Game

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Hi, Sandy!
Please check my script below.


Question:
In your survey, you indicated that you enjoy playing games. What is the name of the game you play? Why and how do you play the game?


My Answer:
I enjoy playing strategy games the most, especially lord of knights is the best. It is mobile game.
Since it is a multiplayer game, I can play it with my friends.
Thus, I feel like I’m hanging out with them even though I’m alone.
When I play the game, I get very excited. In this game, you need to choose the best strategy for win, and order to an attack by the enemy.
The best favorite thing is that it can play anywhere anytime.
튜터 교정 답변

Hi, Sandy! Please check my script below.

Question: In your survey, you indicated that you enjoy playing games. What is the name of the game you play? Why and how do you play the game?

My Answer:

I enjoy playing strategy games the most, especially lord of knights is the best.
► I enjoy playing strategy games the most, especially Lord of Knights is the best. 

It is mobile game.
► It is a mobile game.

Since it is a multiplayer game, I can play it with my friends. 
►  Correct Sentence!

Thus, I feel like I’m hanging out with them even though I’m alone.
►  Correct Sentence!

When I play the game, I get very excited.
► Correct Sentence!

In this game, you need to choose the best strategy for win, and order to an attack by the enemy.
► In this game, you need to choose the best strategy to win, and in order to an attack by the enemy. 

The best favorite thing is that it can play anywhere anytime.
► The most favorite thing is that it can play anywhere anytime.
 

Good Job Victor!

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