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작성자: 1102045838 담당 튜터: Lovely
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
I like traveling domestically.
When I go on a trip, I first search some information on the Internet instead of travel agencies.
There are a lot of traveling websites or blogs that people recorded their travel by themselves.
There are much enough information such as ticket fee, famous food, how to get there, or accommodations.
Some bloggers post their itinerary in details.
Traveling beginners don’t need to worry about traveling.
You just have to travel with the itinerary so you can get good travel.
If you are planning a trip, you must visit travel blogs.
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I like traveling domestically. When I go on a trip, I first search some information on the Internet instead of travel agencies. There are a lot of traveling websites or blogs that people recorded their travel by themselves. There are much enough information such as ticket fee, famous food, how to get there, or accommodations. Some bloggers post their itinerary in details. Traveling beginners don’t need to worry about traveling. You just have to travel with the itinerary so you can get good travel. If you are planning a trip, you must visit travel blogs.

1. I like traveling domestically. GOOD JOB! smiley

2. When I go on a trip, I first search some information on the Internet instead of travel agencies. GOOD JOB! smiley

3. There are a lot of traveling websites or blogs that people recorded their travel by themselves. -> There are a lot of traveling websites or blogs that people have recorded about traveling.

4. There are much enough information such as ticket fee, famous food, how to get there, or accommodations. GOOD JOB! smiley

5. Some bloggers post their itinerary in details. GOOD JOB! smiley

6. Traveling beginners don’t need to worry about traveling. GOOD JOB! smiley

7. You just have to travel with the itinerary so you can get good travel. -> You just have to travel with the itinerary so you can get good travelling experience.

8. If you are planning a trip, you must visit travel blogs.  GOOD JOB! smiley

Hi Kent,

You have composed good sentences, kudos! I believe you have a lot of knowledge regarding this topic. Just be careful when using the appropriate words and verb forms. Other than that, you did a good job! Keep it up! :-)

-Lovely

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