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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 11. 28 조회 13457

It's rainy day.

작성자: 73724 담당 튜터: Angel
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
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It's rainy day.

I took my son to the school bus in the morning without an umbrella.

That time wasn't rain.

My son played recorder for disabled people into volunteer work at school.

But I was told to teacher that he was inattentive and didn't serious

My wife is very angry. She decide not to buy a toy for him.

He wouln't watch a TV for a week.
튜터 교정 답변

It's rainy day. I took my son to the school bus in the morning without an umbrella. That time wasn't rain. My son played recorder for disabled people into volunteer work at school. But I was told to teacher that he was inattentive and didn't serious My wife is very angry. She decide not to buy a toy for him. He wouln't watch a TV for a week.

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It's a rainy day, but I was able to take my son to their school bus without an umbrella because it was not raining yet this morning. Their school had a volunteer work for people with disabilities, but his teacher told me that he was inatentive and was not serious. My wife got very angry. She decided not to buy a toy for him and he is not allowed to watch TV for a week.

Note:
Red - punctuations and 
Blue - additionals and better expressions
Green - verb usage
Pink - sentence structure
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Hi Mr. Eric,

It was nice to hear something from you again. You have been so active in our speaking and writing exercises. Good job! I would like you to continue practicing until you get used to the language. Please be mindful with the words that you are using in your sentences. Always take note of my corrections. Kindly review tenses too. Have a nice day!

Love,
Teacher Angel

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