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작성자: 1102045838 담당 튜터: Lovely
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
10 years ago, I liked to take pictures
So I often travel domestically by myself at that time
and I took pictures of flowers, trees, mountains, ocean and so on.
My all pictures was saved in my laptop.
My coworker saw my pictures in details and recommand me to post my pictures to the blog.
so I surffed about Gallery for pictures.
Many koreans made and operated the own their blog.
Some people had heavy activities and had many guest.
I decided to make my blog to post my pictures.
since then I have operated my blog and have posted my pictures.
These day, blogs help me to find things i want such as food, traveling, famous spot and so on
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10 years ago, I liked to take pictures So I often travel domestically by myself at that time and I took pictures of flowers, trees, mountains, ocean and so on. My all pictures was saved in my laptop. My coworker saw my pictures in details and recommand me to post my pictures to the blog. so I surffed about Gallery for pictures. Many koreans made and operated the own their blog. Some people had heavy activities and had many guest. I decided to make my blog to post my pictures. since then I have operated my blog and have posted my pictures. These day, blogs help me to find things i want such as food, traveling, famous spot and so on

1. 10 years ago, I liked to take pictures. GOOD JOB! smileyyes

2. So I often travel domestically by myself at that time .  GOOD JOB! smileyyes

3. and I took pictures of flowers, trees, mountains, ocean and so on. GOOD JOB! smileyyes

4. My all pictures was saved in my laptop. -> All of my pictures was saved in my laptop.

5. My coworker saw my pictures in details and recommand me to post my pictures to the blog. -> My coworker saw my pictures in details and recommand me to post my pictures in the blog.
6. so I surffed about Gallery for pictures. -> so I surfed about Gallery for pictures.

7. Many koreans made and operated the own their blog. GOOD JOB! smileyyes

8. Some people had heavy activities and had many guest. -> Some people had heavy activities and had many guests.

9. I decided to make my blog to post my pictures. GOOD JOB! smileyyes

10. since then I have operated my blog and have posted my pictures. -> Since then, I have operated my blog and have posted my pictures.

11. These day, blogs help me to find things i want such as food, traveling, famous spot and so on. -> These days, blogs help me to find things that I want such as food, traveling, famous spot and so on.

Hi Kent,

I'm so delighted to see the improvement in you in terms of grammar and structure. Just be careful when using the plural form of nouns, capitlization, spelling and correct punctuation marks. Other than that, you were able to share your thougts regarding the topic "blog". I'm really happy with your work so keep it up! Have a nice day! :-)

-Lovely



 

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