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SNS

작성자: 71877 담당 튜터: Emily2
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SNS - Social Network Service

I want to talk about SNS such as Facebook, Twitter and Pinterset.

There are a lot of SNS in the world. I think Twitter and Facebook is the most famous SNS.
Facebook has more popular and been getting people than twitter.
Everyday I check Facebook and Twitter.
I prefer reading to writing.
That's because I don't like other people see what I 'am doing and what I'am eating.

I don't think media such as news paper, televison news might always tell the truth.
Media of Our country tell a lie more often than your country.
I believe what twitter said is more near truth than what media said.

I rarely read newspaper and television news.
I have no television at my home

In 2011, twitter and Facebooks credited with role in toppling Egypt's Mubarak.
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SNS - Social Network Service I want to talk about SNS such as Facebook, Twitter and Pinterset. There are a lot of SNS in the world. I think Twitter and Facebook are the most famous SNS. Facebook is more popular and been getting more followers than Twitter. Everyday I check Facebook and Twitter. I prefer reading to writing. That's because I don't like when other people see what I'm doing and what I'm eating. I don't think media outlets such as newspapers and the televison news always tell the truth. The media in our country tell lies more often than your country. I believe what Twitter says is closer to the truth than what media says. I rarely read newspapers and television news. I have no television at my home. In 2011, Twitter and Facebook were credited with playing a role in toppling Egypt's Mubarak.

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