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공개 첨삭 완료 2015. 01. 03 조회 13645

Self Introduction

작성자: 72089 담당 튜터: Duckworth2
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Hello, my name is heedu-Kim and my English name jack. I 'm 45 yesrs old. My wife and I have been married for fifteen years. We have two children. One is a boy and the other is girl. My son is fourteen years old and my daughter is six years old.
We live at Anyang in Gyeonggi province because my wife's family have been lived for a long time and my wife' mother have taken care my son and daughter on some time. and I have given thanks to mother-in-law all the time.

My family interest to camping all together outside. Camping is good to talk each other and is good to our family's relationship. We go to a department store and buy camping outdoor gears and facilities but those things are so expensive. But it is well worth spending money on our family's happiness. I don't think I can live without them. I love them so much
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Hello, my name is heedu-Kim and my English name is Jack. I 'm 45 years old. My wife and I have been married for fifteen years. We have two children. One is a boy and the other is a girl. My son is fourteen years old and my daughter is six years old. We live at Anyang in Gyeonggi province because my wife's family has been lived there for a long time and my wife's mother has taken care of my son and daughter for some time. and I have given give thanks to my mother-in-law all the time. My family interest to camping likes to camp all together outside. Camping is good to talk  for talking to each other and is good to for our family's relationship. We go to a department store and buy camping outdoor gears and facilities equipment but those things are so expensive. But it is well worth spending money on our family's happiness. I don't think I can could live without them. I love them so much.

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