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공개 첨삭 완료 2015. 01. 08 조회 12549

Tiger parenting

작성자: 119846 담당 튜터: Jasmine1
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In these days in Korea, married couples do not have many children. They have only one or two kids. So they try to give a lot of things to their children. They give their children good education, and sufficient items what the kids want. But It seems they do not concern about giving manners to their children. I know kids are very cute, active, and unpreditable, but I think it is a parent's duty to watch carefully their kids especially in public for safty and not to disturb other people.
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In These days in Korea, married couples do not have many children. They have only one or two kids. So they try to give a lot of things to their children. They give their children a good education, and a sufficient number of items what the kids want. But it seems they aren't concerned about teaching their children manners. do not concern about giving manners to their children. I know kids are very cute, active, and unpreditable, but I think it is a parent's duty to carefully watch carefully their kids especially in public for safty and not to disturb other people.

Excellent piece of writing!

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