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공개 첨삭 완료 2015. 01. 09 조회 14170

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I saw news about terror in France last night. Terrorists attacked a media company and killed around 12 people. The media company has wrote articles about making fun of Islam. The victims include cartoon journalist who draw cartoons depreciate Muhammad. The opinions on the terror has been rose on the internet board. Most of the opinion is that it is excessive and that should not be happened, even though the media lampooned their religion.
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I saw news about terror in France last night. Terrorists attacked a media company and killed around 12 people. The media company has written wrote articles about making fun of Islam. The victims include cartoon journalists (pl) who draw cartoons depicting Muhammad. The opinions on the terror have risen on internet boards. has been rose on the internet board. Most of the opinions are that it is excessive and that should not be happened, even though the media lampooned their religion.

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