Hello. Monica
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
I wanted to talk with you more last class. Because the title we had is very controversial object.
These days, A lot of people spend a lot of time in posting on their SNS and browsing others.
It has many advantanges. From those SNSs, we can know that what our friends are interested with and new infromaition. But when we see other's SNS, we can feel ofloss with what we don't have.
Overall we have to be smarter than smart equipments such as smartphone.
These days, A lot of people spend a lot of time in posting on their SNS and browsing others.
It has many advantanges. From those SNSs, we can know that what our friends are interested with and new infromaition. But when we see other's SNS, we can feel ofloss with what we don't have.
Overall we have to be smarter than smart equipments such as smartphone.
튜터 교정 답변
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