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공개 첨삭 완료 2015. 02. 04 조회 12625

Unit 10_ Playing sports

작성자: 1102055849 담당 튜터: Wynston2
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
In the background survey, you indicated that you like to play baseball. Please describe the most interesting baseball game you played. When did you play that game? What happened during the game? What made it interesting? Provide as many details as possible.

When I was at the elementary school, the baseball was one of the popular sports so that many of my classmates played a baseball together after school.Usually the baseball player were consisted of male players, butI and my best friend’s had a chance to join the game one time.We tried to do out best, but we made the constant strikes and it ended up causing the main reason for my team to lose the game. Even though my team defeated the game, participating the guy’s baseball game itself became the unforgettable and interesting experience to me.
튜터 교정 답변

In the background survey, you indicated that you like to play baseball. Please describe the most interesting baseball game you played. When did you play that game? What happened during the game? What made it interesting? Provide as many details as possible.

When I was at IN the elementary school, the baseball was one of the popular sports so that many of my classmates played a baseball together after school. Usually the baseball playerS were consisted of MAINLY male, players, but ON ONE OCCASION,  I and my best friend’s had a chance to join the game. one time.  We tried to do out OUR best, but we made the constant strikes and it WHICH ended up causing the main reason for my OUR team to lose the game. Even though my team  WE WERE defeated the game, PLAYING A GAME WHICH WAS TRADITIONALLY A MALE SPORT  participating the guy’s baseball game itself became the AN unforgettable and interesting experience to me.

 

 

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