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공개 첨삭 완료 2015. 02. 10 조회 13627

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작성자: 1100817829 담당 튜터: Christine1
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Hi, Christine1

I like most Facebook.
I write my story and post potos on Facebook.
I write on Facebook that I want to say and to inform to my freind.
and If I have new information, I write on Facebook.
Because good news and information is that I want to share with eveyone.
In addition, I upload photos of friends, my pictures on Facebook.
I can see what they are up to thest day.
I still keep in touch with my ex-coworker.
I think that I have read various articles on the Facebook, I can be seen that new facts.
Face book is an excellent way to make more personal connection.

Have a good day!
Bye!!
튜터 교정 답변

Hi, Christine the SNS that I like the most is Facebook. I usually write stories that are usually composed of what I want to say and communicate to my friends, and post them on Facebook. I also upload photos and share with my friends. If I have new information, I always post it on Facebook because I like to share good news and information with everyone. In addition, I sometimes upload photos of my friends’on Facebook so that I can see what they are up to. I still keep in touch with my ex-coworker VIA Facebook.  I have read various articles on Facebook, and I can obtain new facts and information. Face book is an excellent way to make more personal connection. Have a good day! Bye!!

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