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공개 첨삭 완료 2015. 03. 10 조회 13617

Self Intorduction

작성자: 119940 담당 튜터: Love
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
I think I was a optimistic and outgoing person that liked to meet people and talk with them.
I also seemed to be a very talkitive and not to think something more serious. Especially I didn't like to write anything such as reports, essaies, letters and etc.

I had a tend to think a conclusion hurrily or to ignore the procedures about 2 - 3 years ago. Because it was convenient to me personally.

But these days I think my personailty got changed much. How?
I think more seriously something than before for example What happened, Why happened and How can I deliver that circumstances and information well and effciently to my boss or the concerned people.

I don't hate to change my personality. because It's fun to analyze my work and incidents to happen. And it gives me a good time to think more serious about something.

Thinking... Even though it often gives me a stress to write or report about something, on the contrary I think it gives me a good pleasure about how to think.
튜터 교정 답변

I think I was a optimistic and outgoing person that liked to meet people and talk with them. I also seemed to be a very talkitive and not to think something more serious. Especially I didn't like to write anything such as reports, essaies, letters and etc. I had a tend to think a conclusion hurrily or to ignore the procedures about 2 - 3 years ago. Because it was convenient to me personally. But these days I think my personailty got changed much. How? I think more seriously something than before for example What happened, Why happened and How can I deliver that circumstances and information well and effciently to my boss or the concerned people. I don't hate to change my personality. because It's fun to analyze my work and incidents to happen. And it gives me a good time to think more serious about something. Thinking... Even though it often gives me a stress to write or report about something, on the contrary I think it gives me a good pleasure about how to think.

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-> I think I used to be an optimistic and outgoing person that liked to meet people and talk with them.

-> I also seemed to be a very talkative and I didn't take things seriously.

-> Especially, I didn't like to write anything such as reports, essays, letters, and etc.

-> About 2 to 3 years ago, I had the tendency to think of conclusions hurriedly or to ignore the procedures.

-> However, these days I think my personailty has changed much.

-> I think of things more seriously than before. For example, I think of what happened, why it happened and how I can deliver those circumstances and information well and efficiently to my boss or the concerned people.

-> I don't mind changing my personality, because it's fun to analyze my work and incidents that happen.

-> It also gives me a good time to think more seriously about something.

-> Even though it often gives me a stress to write or report about something, on the contrary, I think it gives me a good pleasure. about how to think.

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Hi James! Here are some points you should remember:

  • Be mindful of your punctuations. Learn how to properly use a comma (,) and period (.) in your sentences.
  • Learn how to use the indefinite articles [a/an]. Remember than [a] is used before a consonant and [an] is used before a vowel. Furthermore, we don't use the indefinite article with uncountable nouns.
  • Be careful of your spelling. Refer to a dictionary for the proper spelling of words.
  • Take note of proper capitalization. We only capitalize the first letter of a word after a period or if it's a proper noun.
  • Enrich your vocabulary further and learn the proper usage of words.
  • Avoid starting your sentence with conjunctions such as, "and", "but", "or".. etc... It is done is spoken English, but not in writing

See you next class James! laugh 

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