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공개 첨삭 완료 2015. 03. 10 조회 13401

Reading Newspapers 3 (2 of 2)

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Now, let's talk about today's topic, that is newspaper.
Actually I made a subscription of real daily newspaper for my father-in-law.
Because he is almost 75 and he is not used to reading recent news from mobile App.
As you may know, there was a terror to the Ambassador of the US, which was happened in the center
of Seoul city.
I read it from the newspaper and one thing that I was really impressed by the Ambassador was his
attitude right after he got the face operation in Sebrance Hospital.
He expressed '함께 갑시다' on his Twitter. it means 'Let's go together' in English.
Even thouth he was attacked by the stranger with no preparation, he really worried about the relationship between South Korea and the US. He gave us a great impression and
I believe that there would not be any risk or threaten between two countries.
He would be a respectable role model to many younger people.
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Now, let's talk about today's topic, which is "Reading Newspapers". that is newspaper. Actually I made a subscription of real I subscribed to a daily newspaper for my father-in-law, because he is almost 75 and he is not used to readingthe latest recent news from a mobile App. The most recent article I read in the newspaper, As you may know, was an article about the face slashing of there was a terror to the US Ambassador of the US, to Korea, which was happened in the center of Seoul City. I read it from the newspaper and one thing that The part read which I was really impressed me, was by the Ambassador's was his attitude right after he got the face operation in Sebrance Hospital. He expressed '함께 갑시다' on his Twitter which it means. "Let's go together" in English. Even thougth he was suddenly attacked by the a stranger with no preparation, he appeared really worried about the relationship between South Korea and the US. He gave us a great impression (which I believed), and I believe that there would not be any risk or threaten between the two countries. The Ambassador would be a respectable role model to many younger people!

 

*** Great job, Francisco.  All the the alterations you see are merely grammatical.  The main theme of your statements are very much understood. 

 

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