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공개 첨삭 완료 2015. 03. 19 조회 13373

upset and fighting

작성자: 119846 담당 튜터: Jennifer1
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I bought an apartment last month. I like the town due to the traffic convenience and beautiful scenery.
I often visit a real estate website which is the biggest website among that kind of website in Korea.
Yesterday, I read an article that somebody said that the town is strongly assumed that the air is polluted by the find dust.
But that is not true. Because I have been lived in this region more than forty years.
I argued by replying to the article to keep the value of my apartment safe.
튜터 교정 답변

I bought an apartment last month. I like the town due to the traffic convenience and beautiful scenery. I often visit the largest and most popular real estate website in Korea. Yesterday, I read an article that somebody said, "that the town is strongly assumed that the air is polluted by the find dust". This statment is not true because I have been living in this region for more than forty years and this is not an air-polluted area. I replied to the article about their untrue findings. I want people to know that this area is safe and community is valued by those who live here.  

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