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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 04. 01 조회 14713

A self-introduction

작성자: 1102043082 담당 튜터: Jess
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hello !
Hello!
I introduce my-self.
My name is Yongsub Kyeong.
And nick name(English name) is Young. So, please just call me 'Young'.
I was born in Kimje city near by Junju city, north Julla province in 1962.
I'm 53 years old. I graduated Hanyang graduated shool in 2012
I studied specially, power engineering of electric field in the graduated school.
My hobby is excise, playing tennis, golf and baseball.
I have been worked in KPLI(Korea Power Learning Institute) since december last year.
KPLI teaches and supports all of the knowledge about power plant to applicants
It is located at Tae-an gun south chung-cheong province
4-months ago, I worked the thermal power plant at Inchon. power plant produces electricity.
I have 3 family, wife, an elder daughter, and another is a son.
They live in namyangju city, gyeonggi province.
My wife's hobby is playing golf too. she is better player than me playing golf.
I lost my money 10,000 won to my wife for screen golf last saturday.
My daughter teachs national language in the middle school. Her hobby is reading a book.
And my son goes to Korea university in seoul. His major is speech and media department.
He is a junior at university.
튜터 교정 답변

Hello! I would like to introduce my self, my name is Yongsub Kyeong  and my nick name(English name) is Young. So, please, just call me 'Young'. I was born in Kimje City near by Junju City, North Julla province on 1962. I'm 53 years old. I am a graduate of  Hanyang Graduated School in 2012.My major was all about  Power Engineering of Electric Field. My hobbies are exercising, playing tennis, golf and baseball. I have been working in KPLI(Korea Power Learning Institute) since December last year. KPLI teaches and supports all of the knowledge about power plant to applicants. It is located at Tae-an gun South Chung-Cheong province 4-months ago and I was assigned to work in the thermal power plant in Incheon. My family is consists of my wife, my daughter and son. They live in Namyangju City, Gyeonggi province. My wife's hobby is playing golf too. She is a better player than me. I spent almost 10,000 won for my wife's Golf screening last Saturday. My daughter teaches national language in the middle school. Her hobby is reading book and my son goes to Korea University in Seoul. His major is Speech and Media Department. He is a junior in that university.

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