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공개 첨삭 완료 2015. 05. 04 조회 13454

introduce

작성자: 1102241791 담당 튜터: Edna1
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my name is Jung Hye In. I'm 26 years old.
I live with my family in Sejong. My family consists of four members. my parents, younger brother and me. I am majoring in public administration at Hankuk University.
I am a senior and expect to graduate in a couple of month.
I want to work in the Human resources department in a public enterprise after graduation. Therefore I need to opic IH level to apply to a public enterprise.
I am outgoing and I like spending time with my friends or family.
As for my hobby, recently I've been into taking pictures. So, I love to visit gorgeous places to take pictures on weekends. This is one of the best ways to blow away my stress related job seeking.
Also, I like to watch a movie. so I usually catch the movie at least once or twice a month bring my boy friend. I have been dating him for six years. Are you suprised?
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My name is Jung Hye In. I'm 26 years old. I live with my family in Sejong. My family consists of four members. My parents, younger brother and me. I am majoring public administration at Hankuk University. I am a senior and expect to graduate in a couple of month. I want to work in the Human resources department in a public enterprise after graduation. Therefore I need to have opic IH level to apply to a public enterprise. I am an outgoing person and I like spending time with my friends or family. As for my hobby, recently I've been into photography. So, I love to visit gorgeous places to take pictures on weekends. This is one of the best ways to blow away my stress related to job seeking. Also, I like to watch a movie. So I usually catch the movie at least once or twice a month and bring my boy friend with me. I have been dating him for six years. Are you surprised?

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