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공개 첨삭 완료 2015. 05. 05 조회 13295

introduce myself.

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Let me introduce myself. I am a outgoing personality and I am a family-orented nature. also the campany is passionate white collar. I used to hang out with colleagues more than three times of week. when i got a bit bored

I to the future more gentle nature of the owners want to be.
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Let me introduce myself.

I am a outgoing personality and I am a family-orented nature. -> I am have an outgoing personality and I am a family-oriented person.

also the campany is passionate white collar. -> Also, the company is passionate white collar.

I used to hang out with colleagues more than three times of week.

when i got a bit bored I to the future more gentle nature of the owners want to be. -> When I got a bit bored I to the future more gentle nature of the owners want to be. ( I couldn't understand your thought here. Sorry. Could you please clarify what you are trying to say?)



Hi Jeff,

Good day! Thank you very much for writing here in our web page. I appreciate your effort in really pusuing your interest to improve yourself. I wrote some corrections above beside your written sentences. I hope it helps you a lot. Have a nice day! ^^,

~Teacher Anne :)

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