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공개 첨삭 완료 2015. 05. 09 조회 13351

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작성자: 1460772 담당 튜터: Kat
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
I visited to Hongkong with my mother and one daughter four years ago.

By the way I had a some problem at Airport of Hongkong.

When I find my baggage, I lost my mother. I asked to a security guard around there.

" Please Help me, My mother lost here now.
She is korean and 67 years old. Also, She is wearing yellow jumper and had shot black hair.

So, I and my daugher started finding her at all around Airport.
Fortunately, I found her after 30 minute who she is waiting us at out of the Airport
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I visited to Hongkong with my mother and one daughter four years ago.

> I visited to Hongkong with my mother and one of my daughters four years ago.

By the way I had a some problem at Airport of Hongkong.

> By the way, I had a some problem at the Aairport of Hongkong.

When I find my baggage, I lost my mother.

> When I was find getting my baggage, I lost I found out that my mother was missing.

I asked to a security guard around there. " Please Help me, My mother lost here now.

> I asked the to a airport security to help me find my mother. guard around there. " Please Help me, My mother lost here now.

She is korean and 67 years old. Also, She is wearing yellow jumper and had shot black hair.

> I described my mother to them; she is a 67 years old Korean. and 67 years old. Also, she is wearing a yellow jumper and had a short black hair.

So, I and my daugher started finding her at all around Airport.

> So, I and my daugher and I started finding her at all around the airport.

Fortunately, I found her after 30 minute who she is waiting us at out of the Airport

> Fortunately, I found her after 30 minutes; who she is was waiting for us at outside of the airport.

 

Hi Clara,

I was relieved to know that you found your mom after thirty minutes. That must be the most memorable exeperience you had during your overseas travel. Next time you travel with your loved one, make sure to instruct them not to go anywhere, so that no one will be missing. :) I'm looking forward to talking with you tonight.

♥ Teacher Kat ♥

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