A big fire
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
Title : A big fire
There's a another story on the last weekend.
It was the time I went to my new house from my mother's house.
I am not live in my new house yet.
When I drove my car on the way to my new house, I saw a big smoke flow up to the sky from a distance.
I was curious about where it was started as I was close to the site.
And I found that It was started from a big warehouse for clothes.
The site was accross the canal between my new house.
The company of the warehouse was the fashion company of the affiliate of Samsung group.
I searched a news from my mobile phone, and I found that It was started at 2 o'clock at night.
Even though the time I saw fire was around at noon, I was not put out yet.
The warehouse, size up to 9 times of football ground, was burned to ashes.
This was aired all over the country. And it was assumed as arson.
There's a another story on the last weekend.
It was the time I went to my new house from my mother's house.
I am not live in my new house yet.
When I drove my car on the way to my new house, I saw a big smoke flow up to the sky from a distance.
I was curious about where it was started as I was close to the site.
And I found that It was started from a big warehouse for clothes.
The site was accross the canal between my new house.
The company of the warehouse was the fashion company of the affiliate of Samsung group.
I searched a news from my mobile phone, and I found that It was started at 2 o'clock at night.
Even though the time I saw fire was around at noon, I was not put out yet.
The warehouse, size up to 9 times of football ground, was burned to ashes.
This was aired all over the country. And it was assumed as arson.
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