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공개 첨삭 완료 2015. 06. 02 조회 13266

First diary in English

작성자: 1102047346 담당 튜터: Katelyn1
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“Writing a diary in English” is like history. It means it was long long time ago. I don’t remember exactly but I think my last diary in English was in my middle school. These days, my daily life on weekdays is so simple. Doing exercise, work, study English and sleep. That’s all. But, today is a little special. I got some homework from you. So I made answers about your questions and I practiced the topic “Fashion”. Also, now I’m writing a diary in English because of your advice. I hope to improve my English skill and get a good score from OPIc. Therefore, I will do my best to study English with you.
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“Writing a diary in English” is like history. It means it was long long time ago. I don’t remember exactly but I think my last diary in English was in my middle school. These days, my daily life on weekdays is so simple. Doing exercise, work, study English and sleep. That’s all. But, today is a little special. I got some homework from you. So I made answers about your questions and I practiced the topic “Fashion”. Also, now I’m writing a diary in English because of your advice. I hope to improve my English skill and get a good score from OPIc. Therefore, I will do my best to study English with you.

 

 

It seems like forever ago since I've written in english in my diary. I don't remember exactly but I think the last time that I wrote in English in my diary was in middle school.I have created a routine for myself during the week that consists of, exercising, going to work, studying English and sleeping. However, today is a little bit special. My English teacher assigned me homework. My teacher assigned me questions to answer about the topic that I chose, which was '' Fashion''. My English teacher lets me choose the topic for every class! I really like that she lets me choose the topic. My teacher suggested to start writing a diary in English because she knows that I keep a diary in Korean. My ultimate goal is to get a high score on my OPic exam so I hope to improve my English skills the best that I can. Therefore, I will do my best to study English and try out the suggestions that my English teacher offers. 

 

Jake- The reason why i replaced (you) and put my english teacher is because if you are writing a diary in english to yourself then you wouldn't say you because you are only talking to yourself. So if you are writing to yourself in a diary in english you would refer to (me) as your english teacher. I added a few sentences in there that would express more feelings and emotions about how it makes you feel as well. If you have any questions we can go over it today in class. Thank you so much for doing this and you can send me as many of these as you want for me to go over. You are a great student Jake and I can tell how much it means to you to score high on your opic exam. I promise to help you in anyway that I can. 

 

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