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Describing the office

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Title : Describing the office

I work in 27th story of thirty story building. Two buildings are stood for HQ side by side.
30th story is for CEO. Mostly, Employees don't need to go up there. Even they don't want to go.
26th story is cafeteria. It shows beautiful scenery like the Han river, Nam-san mountain. I think the scenery is the one of the most fantastic scenery among the same kind companies.
There is another cafeteria in the first basement. Employees can choose food around twenty different kinds. At the lunch time, the elevator and the cafeteria crowded with a wave of people.
Sometimes I pass my lunch not willing to go into the chaos.
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Title : Describing the office I work in 27th story of thirty story building. Two buildings are stood for HQ side by side. 30th story is for CEO. Mostly, Employees don't need to go up there. Even they don't want to go. 26th story is cafeteria. It shows beautiful scenery like the Han river, Nam-san mountain. I think the scenery is the one of the most fantastic scenery among the same kind companies. There is another cafeteria in the first basement. Employees can choose food around twenty different kinds. At the lunch time, the elevator and the cafeteria crowded with a wave of people. Sometimes I pass my lunch not willing to go into the chaos.

Describing the Office

I work on the 27th floor of my building. There are two buildings of Samsung Headquarters that stand side by side. The 30th floor is reserved for the CEO. Employees rarely go up there. On the 26th floor is a cafeteria. There is a beautiful view of the Han River and Nam-san mountain. I think the view at Samsung is among the most fantastic of all the views in the city. There is another cafeteria in the basement. Employees have their choice of over twenty different kinds of foods. At lunchtime, the elevators and the cafeterias are packed so sometimes, I pass on lunch because I'm not willing to fight the chaos.

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