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공개 첨삭 완료 2015. 06. 10 조회 13897

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I enjoy cooking canape beacuse it's recipe is very simple and taste is good.


canape is consist of base, spread, garnish.
and it uses for appetizer,dessert.


canape has very simple recipe and don't need to prepare special material in advance.
canape matching many kind of drinks like a beer, wine, cocktail .


usually i use cracker by base.
i use spread that i mixed can of tuna fish and extract of lemon and mayonnaise.
except garnish.

So if my friend come my home, i will cook canape for him and drink some alcohol.
i expect that canape will make a nice time
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I enjoy cooking canape beacuse it's recipe is very simple and taste is good. canape is consist of base, spread, garnish. and it uses for appetizer,dessert. canape has very simple recipe and don't need to prepare special material in advance. canape matching many kind of drinks like a beer, wine, cocktail . usually i use cracker by base. i use spread that i mixed can of tuna fish and extract of lemon and mayonnaise. except garnish. So if my friend come my home, i will cook canape for him and drink some alcohol. i expect that canape will make a nice time

 

CORRECTIONS:

I enjoy cooking canape beacuse it's recipe is very simple and taste is good. canape is consist of base, spread, garnish. and it uses for appetizer,dessert.

--> I enjoy cooking Canape because its recipe is very simple and it tastes good. Canape is consist of base, spread, garnish and it can be use for appetizer and dessert.

Notes: It's (short for it is) when you say its (you are referring to the subject itself)

 

canape has very simple recipe and don't need to prepare special material in advance. canape matching many kind of drinks like a beer, wine, cocktail.

--> Canape has a very simple recipe and doesn't need to prepare special materials. Canape is good with beer, wine or cocktail.

Note: Do not use too much period.

 

usually i use cracker by base. i use spread that i mixed can of tuna fish and extract of lemon and mayonnaise. except garnish.

--> I usually use craker as the base, I use spread so I can mix it with tuna, extract of lemon and mayonnaise.

Note: Make it clear, arrange the sentence properly.

 

So if my friend come my home, i will cook canape for him and drink some alcohol. i expect that canape will make a nice time

-->If my friend come to my home, I cook Canape for them and drink alcohol. I expect that Canape can make a nice moment with my friends.

Note: Use the right tenses, make sure that the sentence is understandable.

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I enjoy cooking Canape because its recipe is very simple and it tastes good. Canape is consist of base, spread, garnish and it can be use for appetizer and dessert. Canape has a very simple recipe and doesn't need to prepare special materials. Canape is good with beer, wine or cocktail. I usually use craker as the base, I use spread so I can mix it with tuna, extract of lemon and mayonnaise. if my friend come to my home, I cook Canape for them and drink alcohol. I expect that Canape can make a nice moment with my friends.

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