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공개 첨삭 완료 2015. 06. 11 조회 13999

Trip to seaside

작성자: pos498087 담당 튜터: Wynston1
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I went to seaside with my wife from last Friday night to Saturday afternoon.
Boosan is very nice place to enjoy the active energy from young generation, I mean youth.
Boosan has a lot of tourist attractions, I select Gwang-an beach because I have a good memory on the beach. I made a reservation at private house rental, and lodged at there. In front of the beach, beaufiful suspension bridge is transporting vehicles what has double deck, I mean upper lane and lower lane. Through the night, we took a nice picture with the bridge in the background. My wife like to take a picture in the nature, especially about flower. But she also enjoy take a picture of my family. As you know, me and my wife are long-distance couple so we have to have a good time by journey.
By the way, what is difference with trip and journey? and travel?
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I went to THE seaside with my wife from last Friday night THROUGH Saturday afternoon. Boosan is A very nice place to enjoy AND BE active!   energy, THIS REALLY HELPS A PERSON FEEL YOUTHFUL AND VIBRANT!. from young generation, I mean youth. Boosan has a lot of tourist attractions.  I selectED Gwang-an beach because I have a good memory on the beach. I made a reservation FOR A private house rental, and lodged at there. In front of the beach, beaufiful A BEAUTIFUL suspension bridge is THE THOROUGHFARE FOR BOTH mean upper and lower laneS. Through the night, we took nice pictureS with the bridge in the background. My wife likeS to take a pictureS in the nature, especially about flowerS. But she also enjoy takING a pictureS of my OUR family. As you know, me and my wife are long-distance couple so we have to have a good time by journey. ON TRIPS.  By the way, what is difference with trip and journey? and travel?

 

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