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공개 첨삭 완료 2015. 06. 15 조회 12981

Pet

작성자: 1102104140 담당 튜터: Gabby2
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
i have a puppy named Kippum. it means joy in Korean.
because we got joy after we met him.
he is a 1-years-old Maltese.


his length of fillet weld is very longer than other Maltese.
so his appearnce is always remarkably, when he get in the many dogs.


Whenever I pat her forehead, he fall asleep with his head on my leg.
todays, he got a our family name. now his name is Kippum Kim.
it can proof that we are family.
튜터 교정 답변

i have a puppy named Kippum. it means joy in Korean. because we got joy after we met him. he is a 1-years-old Maltese. his length of fillet weld is very longer than other Maltese. so his appearnce is always remarkably, when he get in the many dogs. Whenever I pat her forehead, he fall asleep with his head on my leg. todays, he got a our family name. now his name is Kippum Kim. it can proof that we are family.

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CORRECTIONS:

i have a puppy named Kippum. it means joy in Korean. because we got joy after we met him. he is a 1-years-old Maltese.

--> I have a puppy named Kippum, and it means joy in Korean language, because we felt joy after we met him. He is a 1 year old Maltese.

Notes: Be mindful about the subject-verb agreement.

 his length of fillet weld is very longer than other Maltese. so his appearnce is always remarkably, when he get in the many dogs.

-->His length is very long compare to other Maltese, so his appearance is always evident when he is with other dogs.

Note: Arrange your words, make the sentence understandable.

Whenever I pat her forehead, he fall asleep with his head on my leg. todays, he got a our family name. now his name is Kippum Kim. it can proof that we are family.

--> Whenever I touch his forehead, he fall asleep with his head on my legs. He also get our family name, now he is Kippum Kim and it is a proof that he is part of our family.

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