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수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
I go on manufacturing IT companies name Miracom Inc.
We provide a SW SOLUTION. named like MES, FMB, EES, etc.
Our company established in 1999 and grew steadily.
In MES solutin, we are ranked first in KOREA and we have a competitive power in overseas market.
our company has a disadvantage.
it is that we have a many business trip more than 8 month per year. so we can't be a faithful father in our family.
but we got a proud our company's position and satisfied our salary.
We provide a SW SOLUTION. named like MES, FMB, EES, etc.
Our company established in 1999 and grew steadily.
In MES solutin, we are ranked first in KOREA and we have a competitive power in overseas market.
our company has a disadvantage.
it is that we have a many business trip more than 8 month per year. so we can't be a faithful father in our family.
but we got a proud our company's position and satisfied our salary.
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