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공개 첨삭 완료 2015. 07. 05 조회 14190

Please check my sentences grammatically

작성자: 1102047346 담당 튜터: Katharine1
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I afraid that "Rich-poor gab" will be wider.
In the future, the technology will be more develop,
the rich just "buy" technology like the robots which can clean the house and wash dishes.. "not employ" people.
That's why there is the risk the rich are richer, other people are poorer in the future.

AI give many conveniences to people for example that people don't need to do some risk works like making high building.

There is only thing that robots can't replace people.
That is "emotion and sympathy".
I mean some jobs that need emotion and sympathy like consultants or counslers can't replaced by AI.

When I feel tired while driving, I want to be inveted automatical car.

AI program can effect my current job.
AS you know, I make a report every day, I need much information if I want to make a report correctly. I'm sure that the progaram is good at gathring information better than me. That's why I have to do something that program can't, like emotional thing as I told you.
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I am afraid that "Rich-poor gabp" will be wider. In the future, the technology will be more developed, with the rich just "buying" technology like the robots which can clean the house and wash dishes.. "not employ" people. That's why there is the risk that as the rich are become richer, other people are poorer in the future. AI will give many conveniences to people, for example, people don't need to do some risky works like making high buildings. There is only one thing that robots can't replace-- in people. That is "emotion and sympathy".emotion and sympathy in people. I mean some jobs that need emotion and sympathy like consultants or counslers can't replaced by AI. When I feel tired while driving, I want to be inveted automatical car I wish that automated cars had been invented. AI programs could can eaffect my current job. AS you know, I make a report every day, so I need much information if I want to make a report correctly. I'm sure that the progaram is good at gathring information better than me. That's why I have to do something that program can't, like emotional thing as I told you.

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