Please check my sentences grammatically (7.7 (1))
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
I worked out at the gym in the night.
Sometimes I feel burden when I go to work.
It is stressful but I think if I want to improve myself, I have to get burden.
In korea, there is a limition retirement. That is "60 years old".
On these days there are not many people who retire when they are 60 years old.
In my case, maybe I will retire 40, 50years old.
Unfortunately, human life is longer than before, almost 100 years old!
That's why 50 years old means, that is just half of my all life.
I would already retire. That is awful!
I will quit my job at least 35 years old.
I want to do own my job.
If I retire, I want not to be worried about money.
I don't any plan to go other company.
Some days, I want to do other work for my career.
It is important to get a variety experiences.
I think Korea is not common sense.
There are so many secret accident like getting bribe.
Korea look like a good nation for only rich.
I have to overcome Racism in America.
Sometimes I feel burden when I go to work.
It is stressful but I think if I want to improve myself, I have to get burden.
In korea, there is a limition retirement. That is "60 years old".
On these days there are not many people who retire when they are 60 years old.
In my case, maybe I will retire 40, 50years old.
Unfortunately, human life is longer than before, almost 100 years old!
That's why 50 years old means, that is just half of my all life.
I would already retire. That is awful!
I will quit my job at least 35 years old.
I want to do own my job.
If I retire, I want not to be worried about money.
I don't any plan to go other company.
Some days, I want to do other work for my career.
It is important to get a variety experiences.
I think Korea is not common sense.
There are so many secret accident like getting bribe.
Korea look like a good nation for only rich.
I have to overcome Racism in America.
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