Please check my sentences grammatically (7.13)
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
I will make a global club that we study about global such as global company.
On Thursday, it is the first day that I start a global club.
When I walk on the street at night, I would be scared.
I'm worried about coming across the one who has a gun or knife to threat me.
When it's raining, I feel gloomy and energy down.
When it's thunderstorm, I'm so scared because of too noise.
The potential to get thunder is lower than the potential to get lottery.
Some of my friends met ghosts during military service.
There are so many horror story about military.
I was even in Seoul when I wan in military.
That's why I didn't have any chances to meet ghost.
All ghosts like country not city.
It is similar to many people to scared stand by public.
Practice is the good way to reduce scary about standing by public.
If I would have practiced, I don't feel fear.
That I araid of is not getting old.
Although I'm getting old, if I didn't improve myself, that is my afraid.
On Thursday, it is the first day that I start a global club.
When I walk on the street at night, I would be scared.
I'm worried about coming across the one who has a gun or knife to threat me.
When it's raining, I feel gloomy and energy down.
When it's thunderstorm, I'm so scared because of too noise.
The potential to get thunder is lower than the potential to get lottery.
Some of my friends met ghosts during military service.
There are so many horror story about military.
I was even in Seoul when I wan in military.
That's why I didn't have any chances to meet ghost.
All ghosts like country not city.
It is similar to many people to scared stand by public.
Practice is the good way to reduce scary about standing by public.
If I would have practiced, I don't feel fear.
That I araid of is not getting old.
Although I'm getting old, if I didn't improve myself, that is my afraid.
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