Allowance of immigrants in Korea
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I think that Korea should consider the allowance of immigrants.
Korea is one of the countries whose birthrates are lowest in the world. Our population has started to decrease, and the portion of the olds are increasing speedily. It means that smaller young generations should support larger old generations in the future.
As a result, it is expected that Korean people will have so many problems economically and socially. The olds tend to save more money. Growing proportions of the olds induce more saving and less consumptions. At last, it is the big reason of the economic recessions.
In this point, inflows of the immigrants are the good way to solve decreasing populations. Immigrants from south-east asia are good human resources for manufacturing or service industy because of their low level of salary. So, it will improve the cost-competitiveness of Korean companies.
Korea is one of the countries whose birthrates are lowest in the world. Our population has started to decrease, and the portion of the olds are increasing speedily. It means that smaller young generations should support larger old generations in the future.
As a result, it is expected that Korean people will have so many problems economically and socially. The olds tend to save more money. Growing proportions of the olds induce more saving and less consumptions. At last, it is the big reason of the economic recessions.
In this point, inflows of the immigrants are the good way to solve decreasing populations. Immigrants from south-east asia are good human resources for manufacturing or service industy because of their low level of salary. So, it will improve the cost-competitiveness of Korean companies.
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