What will you bring to a desert island?
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A match box, an emergency medical kit, and a bible are more necessary than food in an island because a match box is crucial to lit fire, an emergency medical kit protects me from being seriously wounded, and I can relax myself while reading a bible. First, fire enables people to cook, do something at night, and to keep warm in outdoors. Without a match box, it is so hard to lit fire. So I decide to bring a match box in a desert island. Second, having small scar or minor sickness makes us to endanger our life in an island. So it is important to keep an emergency medical kit in the bag in an island. For this reason, a company nurse always gives a medical kit to employees who go to a business trip. Third, controlling my mind and having peace allows me to cheer up and do my best to escape from a desert island. It is very easy to be irritated in frustrated situations. As I read a bible, I can relax and get a thinking power to analyze what is going on and what I have to do in the situation
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