What is the greatest invention in the 20th century? (1/2)
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
I believe internet is the most important invention in the 20th century. There are two main reasons why I think so. One is internet connects people in the world. The other is internet provides various information with us.
First, using internet enables us to easily communicate each other around the world so that we are globally connected through internet. For example, my graduate advisor said it was difficult for him to communicate with his family and relatives who live in Korea when he had studied abroad in U.S. The only thing he could he could do was to call to them regularly as paying expensive international calling fees. However, when I studied in U.S. in 2007, I often communicated with my family for free through internet. I called to them with face-time, emailed and communicated with them by using an instant messenger. So at that time, it seemed I lived in a distant area from Seoul within Korea. Like this, internet makes us to broaden our living boundaries to worldwide.
First, using internet enables us to easily communicate each other around the world so that we are globally connected through internet. For example, my graduate advisor said it was difficult for him to communicate with his family and relatives who live in Korea when he had studied abroad in U.S. The only thing he could he could do was to call to them regularly as paying expensive international calling fees. However, when I studied in U.S. in 2007, I often communicated with my family for free through internet. I called to them with face-time, emailed and communicated with them by using an instant messenger. So at that time, it seemed I lived in a distant area from Seoul within Korea. Like this, internet makes us to broaden our living boundaries to worldwide.
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