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공개 첨삭 완료 2015. 08. 17 조회 12993

bicycle riding fatigue

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Title : Bicycle riding fatigue

I rode a bicycle with coworkers include my boss last weekend.
Our party was three. We were planned to ride a bicycle from Han river park to Ara canal.
So I woke up at 4 o'clock AM on sunday and drove to the start point, Han river park.
My boss is expirienced person, but I didn't consider it that so much.
Because he is much more older than me, and I thought I was goot at sports.
But I realized that I was wrong. I couldn't follow my boss even though he drove his bicycle slowly and smoothly. After some time passed, I couldn't see his appearance. He stopped his bicycle and waited me. It was a shame to me.
After our riding, I could narrowly come home.
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Title : Bicycle riding fatigue I rode a bicycle with coworkers include my boss last weekend. Our party was three. We were planned to ride a bicycle from Han river park to Ara canal. So I woke up at 4 o'clock AM on sunday and drove to the start point, Han river park. My boss is expirienced person, but I didn't consider it that so much. Because he is much more older than me, and I thought I was goot at sports. But I realized that I was wrong. I couldn't follow my boss even though he drove his bicycle slowly and smoothly. After some time passed, I couldn't see his appearance. He stopped his bicycle and waited me. It was a shame to me. After our riding, I could narrowly come home.

Title: Bicycle Riding Fatigue

I rode a bicycle with co-workers, including my boss, last weekend. There were three in our party. We planned to ride bicycles from Han River Park to Ara Canal. So, I woke up at 4am on Sunday and rode to the starting point, which was Han River Park. My boss is an experienced cyclist; however,  I didn't give this much consideration because he is much older than me and I thought I was good at sports. Nonetheless, I realized I was wrong. I couldn't keep up with my boss even though he rode his bicycle slowly and smoothly. After some time passed, I couldn't see him. He stopped his bicycle and waited for me. I felt ashamed. Afterwards, I could barely ride home.

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