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공개 첨삭 완료 2015. 09. 01 조회 14023

Issues on nation

작성자: 119846 담당 튜터: Joselin1
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
Nowadays, As you know, we had a confict with North Korea at the DMZ.
They buried mines near the barbed-wire fence, and our soldier died by the mine.
We started the megaphone attack whick criticizes the North Gov. and the North hates this.
Because they don't want civilians to know the truth of their government, and the world of freedom.
So they throw a missile to south with saying that if south doesn't stop the megaphone onair in 48 hours, they will start the war.
So the South announced that we will count attack if the North shows a little attack. The tension between the Two arose high. Finally the Two met at the middle point of the countries, named Pan-moon-jeom. And they negothiated a lot of thing about the Two, and now they are saying that Let's the Two go to the future. But I don't believe it.

* After last five month's classes, what do think the my week point for the english?
* Next Five month's, let's concentrate on the week point of mine, and repeat it everyday.
튜터 교정 답변

Nowadays, As you know, we had a confict with North Korea at the DMZ. They buried mines near the barbed-wire fence, and our soldier died by the mine. We started the megaphone attack whick criticizes the North Gov. and the North hates this. Because they don't want civilians to know the truth of their government, and the world of freedom. So they throw a missile to south with saying that if south doesn't stop the megaphone onair in 48 hours, they will start the war. So the South announced that we will count attack if the North shows a little attack. The tension between the Two arose high. Finally the Two met at the middle point of the countries, named Pan-moon-jeom. And they negothiated a lot of thing about the Two, and now they are saying that Let's the Two go to the future. But I don't believe it. * After last five month's classes, what do think the my week point for the english? * Next Five month's, let's concentrate on the week point of mine, and repeat it everyday.

Nowadays, as you know, we have been having a conflict with North Korea at the DMZ. They buried mines near the barbed-wire fence, and one of our soldiers died by the mine. We started the megaphone attack which criticizes the North's government and they hate this because they don't want civilians to know the truth of their government and the world of freedom. So, they threw a missile at the south saying that if the south doesn't stop the megaphone on air in 48 hrs, they will start a war. So the south announced that we will attack if the north attacks. The tension between us has risen high. Finally, both sides met at the middle point of the countries, Pan-moon-jeom and they negotiated many things. Now they are saying, let's go into the future but I don't believe it.

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