Issues on nation
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
Nowadays, As you know, we had a confict with North Korea at the DMZ.
They buried mines near the barbed-wire fence, and our soldier died by the mine.
We started the megaphone attack whick criticizes the North Gov. and the North hates this.
Because they don't want civilians to know the truth of their government, and the world of freedom.
So they throw a missile to south with saying that if south doesn't stop the megaphone onair in 48 hours, they will start the war.
So the South announced that we will count attack if the North shows a little attack. The tension between the Two arose high. Finally the Two met at the middle point of the countries, named Pan-moon-jeom. And they negothiated a lot of thing about the Two, and now they are saying that Let's the Two go to the future. But I don't believe it.
* After last five month's classes, what do think the my week point for the english?
* Next Five month's, let's concentrate on the week point of mine, and repeat it everyday.
They buried mines near the barbed-wire fence, and our soldier died by the mine.
We started the megaphone attack whick criticizes the North Gov. and the North hates this.
Because they don't want civilians to know the truth of their government, and the world of freedom.
So they throw a missile to south with saying that if south doesn't stop the megaphone onair in 48 hours, they will start the war.
So the South announced that we will count attack if the North shows a little attack. The tension between the Two arose high. Finally the Two met at the middle point of the countries, named Pan-moon-jeom. And they negothiated a lot of thing about the Two, and now they are saying that Let's the Two go to the future. But I don't believe it.
* After last five month's classes, what do think the my week point for the english?
* Next Five month's, let's concentrate on the week point of mine, and repeat it everyday.
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