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공개 첨삭 완료 2015. 09. 03 조회 13338

A letter to my friend who is suffering from offensive commentary over the internet

작성자: 1101110724 담당 튜터: Jerry1
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Dear Phil,

I am so sorry to hear that there are someone who left malicious comments at your blogs. You must have been quite upset about it. If I were you, I might think of shutting down my blog page. I know it is a easy way to avoid such an offensive comments, but I know it is not the basic idea of Web 2.0. We need to work for building open and positive social media environment. We cannot succeed if we fhight aginst dirty and offensive commentary. It only makes us weak and frustrated.
I am sure that you will not surrender for them and I hope to read new blogs from your homepage.

Best regards,

Dave
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Dear Phil, I am so sorry to hear that there are people who leave malicious comments on your blogs. You must have been quite upset about it. If I were you, I might think of shutting down my blog page. I know it is an easy way to avoid such offensive comments, and I know it is not the basic idea behind Web 2.0. We need to work on building open and positive social media environment. We can succeed if we fight aginst dirty and offensive commentary which only makes us weak and frustrated. I am sure that you will not surrender to them and I hope to read new blogs from your homepage. Best regards, Dave

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