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공개 첨삭 완료 2015. 09. 11 조회 13924

My wife is 'the Minister of Economy' of my family.

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In my father’s generation, they experience Korean war in 1950. The People were poor. Their life is full of pain. They thought “Even though I am poor but my children should not be”. So, the men worked hard for money and the women saved and spend money for their children’s education. I think, from then, the wives have the power of family’s economy. (It is just personal opinion)
For a better future, it is worth the sacrifice.
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In my father’s generation, they experience Korean war in 1950. The People were poor. Their life is full of pain. They thought “Even though I am poor but my children should not be”. So, the men worked hard for money and the women saved and spend money for their children’s education. I think, from then, the wives have the power of family’s economy. (It is just personal opinion) For a better future, it is worth the sacrifice.

 

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In my father’s generation, they experience Korean war in 1950. The People were poor. Their life is full of pain. They thought “Even though I am poor but my children should not be”. So, the men worked hard for money and the women saved and spend money for their children’s education. I think, from then, the wives have the power of family’s economy. (It is just personal opinion) For a better future, it is worth the sacrifice.

 

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experienced [past tense]

spent [past tense]

was [past tense]

wives had contributed much on their family's financial prosperity. [revised]

It is just my own personal opinion [my]

 

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