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I am Jong Bum Kim, director of Korea aerospace research institute. Now I am going to present The Convergence and Industry-Academy-Institute Cooperation of space Technology.

The World economy of the 21st century is 『The age of fusion innovation』. Convergence between technologies evolves into the product and product, product and service, and convergence between services. This research finds out the necessity, present condition, and revitalization plan of the convergence research and tries to look into the applicability of space technology. Technology convergence is one phenomenon of the technical innovation which combines more than 2 technical elements chemically or mechanically.

The Space launch vehicle is integrated with many subsystems such as Electro-payload, Pairing, Guidance Control System, Structure System, Engine, Propulsion Feeding system.
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I am Jong Bum Kim, director of Korea aerospace research institute. Now I am going to present The Convergence and Industry-Academy-Institute Cooperation of space Technology. The World economy of the 21st century is 『The age of fusion innovation』. Convergence between technologies evolves into the product and product, product and service, and convergence between services. This research finds out the necessity, present condition, and revitalization plan of the convergence research and tries to look into the applicability of space technology. Technology convergence is one phenomenon of the technical innovation which combines more than 2 technical elements chemically or mechanically. The Space launch vehicle is integrated with many subsystems such as Electro-payload, Pairing, Guidance Control System, Structure System, Engine, Propulsion Feeding system.

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I am Jong Bum Kim, director of Korea Aerospace Research Institute. Now, I am going to present "The Convergence and Industry-Academy-Institute Cooperation of space Technology". The World economy of the 21st century is "The age of fusion innovation". Convergence between technologies evolves into the product and product, product and service, and convergence between services. This research finds out the necessity, present condition, and revitalization plan of the convergence research and tries to look into the applicability of space technology. Technology convergence is one phenomenon of the technical innovation which combines more than 2 technical elements chemically or mechanically. The Space launch vehicle is integrated with many subsystems such as Electro-Payload, Pairing, Guidance Control System, Structure System, Engine, Propulsion Feeding system.

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