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작성자: 1100549752 담당 튜터: Lovela
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
According to Interindustry analysis, The Foreward linkage effect of lunar exploration, which is going to be developed in Korea, is 0.74. The Backward linkage effect of lunar exploration is 1.2. From 2011 to 2013, Korea Aerospace Research Institute conducted 7 Cooperation research and 25 internal research. The Rate of cooperation research is 21.9%.

Now, Korea is doing Korean lunar exploration program which is planned to be launched by 2020. The Lunar exploration development project is based on the open-type convergence system. The 15 governmental-funded research institute, industry and academy are jointly participating.
튜터 교정 답변

According to Interindustry analysis, The Foreward linkage effect of lunar exploration, which is going to be developed in Korea, is 0.74. The Backward linkage effect of lunar exploration is 1.2. From 2011 to 2013, Korea Aerospace Research Institute conducted 7 Cooperation research and 25 internal research. The Rate of cooperation research is 21.9%. Now, Korea is doing Korean lunar exploration program which is planned to be launched by 2020. The Lunar exploration development project is based on the open-type convergence system. The 15 governmental-funded research institute, industry and academy are jointly participating.

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