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작성자: 1100549752 담당 튜터: Lovela
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
We need overcome the hindrance factors of the convergence research. The opportunity to be interchanged with the other area researcher is insufficient. The information about the other area researcher is insufficient. There is the difficulty when setting the dynamic objective of research.
We have to revitalize the convergence of research. The foundation sharing the information and idea actively has to be prepared. The convergence research has to be valued economically or socially. It is needed to build the system inducing the spontaneous participation. Thank you.
튜터 교정 답변

We need overcome the hindrance factors of the convergence research. The opportunity to be interchanged with the other area researcher is insufficient. The information about the other area researcher is insufficient. There is the difficulty when setting the dynamic objective of research. We have to revitalize the convergence of research. The foundation sharing the information and idea actively has to be prepared. The convergence research has to be valued economically or socially. It is needed to build the system inducing the spontaneous participation. Thank you.

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